请帮我修改一下雅思作文

发布网友发布时间：2023-07-09 06:13

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热心网友时间：2024-12-04 20:21

多注意语法，你的语法错误有点多。is genetic factors or environment influence?这个is是要去掉的。有些句子里你包含了两个谓语。比如说a multitude of experiments have been proved the gene inherited from our parents make a difference ring the process of person growth.有个have,又有个make.
最后一段最后一句it is essential play the equality attach on both aspects 。还有个to 呢？
以上只挑了几处。要上6分的话，这些错误要减少才行。

还有这个句子the news about wolf-kids or bear-kids,which almost have been well known by world as a whole. 这个主语是the news,后面怎么就没有关于这个新闻的描述了。which后面引导的只相当于一个插入啊。

热心网友时间：2024-12-04 20:22

is genetic factors or environment influence?
改为，Are they genetic factors, or environmental influence?
therefore, leading to people in growing number are apt to recognize the reliability of genetic science
我觉得这句话有问题，分不清主语了。
this baby was born by human,but not contain the basic character of human-beings,instead of wild animals fiercely behavior and living habit.
I think this sentence is totally wrong.
the human baby takes on the characters of animals, acting fiercely and behaving like a animal, instead of human.

其实楼主还有很多问题，语法上的，词汇上的。要是我是评卷老师，我觉得我不会给6分

热心网友时间：2024-12-04 20:22

考鸭论坛里面有免费的雅思作文在线批改你可以去看看已经批改到第五期了