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发布网友 发布时间：2024-05-10 18:19

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热心网友 时间：2024-05-13 12:54

时态有问题，而且明显带有汉语化倾向！This National Day.We have seven day's holiday.On the 1st,I went to the zoo with my parents.i went to see the cinema.i was very happy，because cinema was very funny. on the 3rd,i was at home.i played computer games.i was so happy.on the 4th,i rode a bike with my friends.we were very happy.on the 5th,i swin with my parents.on the 6th,i bought prents for my friends and my parents.at the last day of the holiday,i relaxed and prepured to go back to school.

热心网友 时间：2024-05-13 12:57

seven day's改为a senven-day
1st后加 day
want改went
cinema改film
cinema改the film
3rd后加day
I at home改I stayed at home
was plated改played
4th后加day
was ride改rode
5th后加day
was swim改swam
6th后加day
prent改some presents
for改On，last后加day
relax改relaxed
prepure改prepared
顺便说下，序数词的缩略形式在写作文的时候最好不要用

热心网友 时间：2024-05-13 12:52

1) Today is National XX

2) have a seven-day holiday

3) Firstly, I went to

4) because cinema 应该是 because the film

5) Thirdly, I was at home

6) I played computer games

7) Fourthly, I rode XXX

8) 5thly, I was swimming或者I went to swim

9) 6thly, i bought presents

10) At the last of the XXX, i relaxed and prepared to XX

主要是短文中过去时用法错误和一些动词短语的搭配错误