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热心网友 时间：2024-08-11 10:42

错倒是没什么大错误，而且文章的可取之处就是用到了很多高级词汇，但是本文的最大的问题就是语句有点累赘，说得太累了。可以参考一下几点：
1.To learn oral English through learning English music has an unexpectable influence
一句话用了两次learn，总觉得有点不舒服，可以参考：Learning oral English through English music has an unexpectable influence。

2.Many studies have shown that listening English songs can help input,internalizate and learn the objective language.中间的internalizate我没见过，不知道你是不是想写internalize。而且listen是不及物动词，所以你少了一个to哦。

3.Singing English songs can not only improve the understanding of music, enhance the sense of rhythm, and can learn more words, more sentences, correct pronunciation, right grammers, but also can increase the sense of language and the culture of language.长难句虽然是作文中鼓励的做法，但是这句话未免过长了，而且因为用得过长，中间已经出现了缺少主语的问题了。另外，你的grammar也写错了……我也曾经有过这样的经验，当时就被英语老师小小批斗了一下。因为太长的很有可能会影响到整个句子的平衡，可以参考：Singing English songs can not only improve our understanding of music and enhance the sense of rhythm, but also we can learn more words,sentences,use of grammars and correct pronunciation。Besides， it can help us increase the sense of language and master the knowledge of language culture。仔细体会一下，你在这里犯的错误可不只是一两点了，所以太长的句子不建议使用。

4. It can boost our interest and motivation of learning English. Furthermore, it can improve the obility of oral English.连着两个it can显得不自然，可以参考： It can boost our interest and motivation of learning English. Furthermore, the ability of oral English are also improved.注意ability单词拼写。

5.The text discussed the importance of improving oral English as well as the effects and ways of improving oral English by listening English music.注意几点：（1）discussed最好写成discusses，因为这里不需要表示过去（2）listening后面同样也是少了一个to，而且前面用songs的话，后面建议也用，因为music是没有歌词的，所以你没法学习words, sentences, use of grammars。

上面的句子都只是一些参考，主要还是想告诉你写作文的时候还要注意作文整体的结构，不能逐句翻译。

热心网友 时间：2024-08-11 10:42

To learn(这里不应该用to do而应该用learning,因为是名词形式动词坐主语) oral English through learning English music has an unexpectable influence.
Many studies have shown that listening English songs can help input,internalizate and learn the objective language.
Singing English songs can not only improve the understanding of music, enhance the sense of rhythm, and can(这个can似乎多余,可以删除,前面已经有了) learn more words, more (多余的more,建议删除)sentences, correct pronunciation, right(应该用accurate,"精确的语法"更为妥当) grammers, but also can(这个can也可以删去,因为动词与前面对应相同) increase the sense of language(这里的of language多余重复,可以删去) and the culture of language. It can boost(用法有点不妥,boost更多的是物理上的提高而非精神上的,应该用raise,inspire,encourage更好) our interest and motivation of(介词有误,应该是in,interested和motivate +in) learning(不用这个learning也可表达相同意思,删去) English. Furthermore, it can improve the obility(ability,拼写有误) of oral English. The text discussed(如果要表达,文中讨论的意思的话,建议不要用这种中式英语,可以用it is discussed in the text that) the importance of improving oral English as well as the effects and ways of improving oral English(此处逻辑和用词有误,如果要表达提高口语的方法和效果的话,应该是方法在前,建议使用method这个词而非way,改为as well as the methods and the effect to improve Oral English) by(用through表示方法更加地道) listening English music.

热心网友 时间：2024-08-11 10:43

To learn oral English through /listenning to/ (listen 是不及物动词）English music has an unexpectable influence. Many studies have shown that listening /to/ English songs can help /learn and internalize/ （请注意先后顺序，先learn，再interalize,至于input则不适合用在此处）the /objectives/ of language.(what does it mean by objectives of language???) Singing English songs can not only can learn more words, more sentences, help correct pronunciation and grammers, but also can increase the sense of language and the culture of language. It helps boost our /interests/ （our！not just one!) and motivation /to learn/(motivation of learning english 语法上是没错，可是很别扭，不符合语言习惯） English. Furthermore, it can improve your oral English. The text discussed the importance of improving oral English as well as /the ways and effects/ （先后顺序）of improving oral English by listening English music.

best wishes！

热心网友 时间：2024-08-11 10:43

第一行through好像赢改为by