雅思剑5test1小作文 求评价。
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时间：2024-12-03 06:42
=》是不是可以改成 The line graph describes the percentage...
aged 65 and over
=》aged 65 and older ?
As can be seen from this line graph,there is an increasing trend in the number of old people in three countries.More precisely,the percentage of population went up graally from 9% in 1940 to 15% in 1982 and it will remain stable at 14% in 2018(那个国家？）.After that（去掉？）,the proportion of population aged 65 and over is expected to reach 23% in 2040.Similarly（跟什么说similarly,前后说的好像不一样） ,the proportion of population age 65and over in Sweden accounted for 7% in 1940 to 26% in 2040（对将来数据的预测，时态是否不对？）.While,the percentage of population aged 65 and over in USA remained steady at 5% by the end of 2008,After that, there is a substantial surge and occupies at 27% in 2040（对将来数据的预测，时态是否不对？）.
Therefore,it shows that the percentage of 65+ people are soring moderately in the next three decades.（ 未来三年应该是数据预测，不是shows吧。。。，另外，soring moderately，适度的飙升？有点矛盾？）
soring => soaring
