高手帮改一下六级模拟作文

发布网友 发布时间：2022-05-30 17:55

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热心网友 时间：2023-11-15 23:19

还不错，只是细节问题罢了。本人对语法不大精通，还是自己多看两便语法书吧。就这样了。
How to Keep Mental Health
In our new era, there are a host of people having mental health problems, which is increasingly becoming a common phenomenon. Shocking enough, experts claim that more than 80% of the young, especially students and white collar workers do have that problem!
However, as far as I know, there is something we can do to help mental-healths.
First and foremost, remember to rest after work. Working too long without a break would be harmful to our physical health as well as the mental one. Besides, do not press yourself too much. You should know you can’t always be perfect. Last but not least, be humorous. Comedies may be helpful. Laughter can make you happy and keep you away from mental problems.
All in all, it’s exceedingly vital for us to pay attention to mental health problems of ourselves. However, it is easier said than done. The society as a whole should focus on it! If we take proper measures to it, we can step in to a harmonious, wonderful and healthy society in near future.

热心网友 时间：2023-11-15 23:19

So good ,it maybe tastey good.I cant't write this passage at all just like this and u have a modicum of words also vocabularies. I also belive you can get a high mark.If you let me assess it ,it can get 95 percent in the CET-6.It's so perfect.

热心网友 时间：2023-11-15 23:20

看得出来你积累了不少六级式作文的一些固定词组,用得比较多,语法错误倒没什么,根据题意,你的结构也写得差不多符合,三段式,内容也写得比较到位,整体看挑不出什么大毛病,只是还可以适当长点吧,这篇作文在六级中应该可拿个九十多分到一百零几分吧,离满分也不远了,加油吧,愿你能在六级中夺得高分