雅思小作文,曲线的,求批改,求指错
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发布时间：2022-04-29 01:32
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热心网友
时间：2022-04-30 12:21
刚考完第二次，看到烤鸭战友格外亲切。因为没见到题，所以就您的习作本身说一下吧，由于本身能力有限，如果有漏的地方或者您有疑惑的地方，你可以追问，我一定尽力解答。
1、clear是形容词，clearly是副词，it is 后面应该是形容词。
2、本文是过去时，shows应改为showed。
3、peak本身就是最高的意思，所以不用加at，或者改为shot up。
4、 “it dropped down as a same speed ” as是不是应该改成at？后面的冠词用the，而不是a。
5、“the period 1940 ” 中的period后面有of。
6、“were showed”，我觉得showed就够了，were删了吧，还是您是想表示被动吗？
7、lowest后面应该有名词，不能单用一个最高级。
8、“ What’s more, the birth rate finally higher than the death rate” 缺少谓语动词，finally前加个were。
希望对您有所帮助，预祝雅思考试顺利！
热心网友
时间：2022-04-30 13:39
你最好联系专业老师，因为不仅是语言问题。考试有考试的要求。所以建议你联系汤儒涵老师或者颜炜老师。
热心网友
时间：2022-04-30 15:14
The line in the graph illustrates the death rate and the birth rate in a developing country between 1900 to 1970.
It is clear to show that both death rate and birth rate kept 40% in the first decade(1900~1910), which shows fluctuation of birth rate. The death rate rapidly rose and finally peaked up at 60% in 1920. Then, it dropped down as the same speed as until 1940. In the period 1940 to 1970, death rate maintained a slight fluctuation.
Looking through all the birth rates, there is a slight decreasing from 4o% to 35% from 1900 to 1930. From then on , the birth rate surpassed to the death rate and reached the highest rate(roughly 50%) in 1940, while death rate were showed the lowest. After a sharp raise, the tendency became declined and moderate, and the rates of birth and death respectively kept at 30% and 20% in 1970.
Overall, with the country developed in past 70 years, the death rate and birth rate have changed a lot. the rates turn to better ratios in the future. Now, the birth rate is higher than the death rate.
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